Monday, November 4, 2013

Writing test Narrative

John heard a whisper but no-one was there. He couldn’t see anyone or anything so he then ran in his house and said his mum “I heard a whisper and it sounded like a man was going to kidnap someone” So she replied “Let's go see and if he does we’ll do something to pay him back.” So they left with the car and drove as fast as they can.

They got to the place where John heard the whisper and they saw a random man walking around with a knife and a bandana over his mouth and nose. They got scared but they still went closer and closer to the man (Simon). They were still looking until Simon ran somewhere and they got scared and ran off.

“Got you” Simon said while grabbing John. “Leave my son please please just put him down and we’ll leave you alone and we’ll do nothing” The mum said while crying. Simon replied “You better catch me but I bet you won’t because i may be faster than you!”

The mum left to the car and drove off to their house. She rang her family but they didn’t answer so she left a message and said “My son has just got kidnapped, please come help me if you get this message.” She locked the house and closed all the windows and then went back.

She saw Simon and he was holding her son like a cat. Simon ran fast as to a really dark place with heaps of trees behind it. That place had a fence. She drove there and she was watching him with her big eye. Simon dropped John and said “Stay down there and wait till I come back” So John listened but didn't do as he said.

It was 5 minutes later and john ran away and that five minutes was when simon came back and saw John running. He ran and ran and caught him again so then he took him back to the dark and scary place. He dropped John again but this time he did it 3 times. Then he picked him up and went inside.

The mum was watching and then caught her eye on the knife he had in his back pocket. She tried to run until she’d get to the knife but he grabbed it out of his pocket and was about to stab John. The mum shouted “NOOOOOO.” She was there and then kicked Simon away from her son.

“John bring me your phone so I can call the cops” The mum said. But Simon heard and tried to run off but lucky the mum was so fast she caught him. 111 the mum called and then the police’s got there. She told them all about it and then took Simon to jail and the others took the mum and John back home....Then the mum told John to never let a stranger near him or you never go near a stranger.

Then the next morning he went outside and heard another whisper but much more loud and scary. He went and told the mum and did the same thing...


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