Tuesday, June 18, 2013
The Dragon Machine (Summarising)
One rainy night, George saw his first dragon. He was unnoticed and overlooked, just like the dragons. He went to the library and the dragons followed him. While the dragons were following him they made heaps of messes. Then George found a map to a very overlooked island that dragons will be safe. So he built a machine and flew to the island. But he was imagining the whole time. Then when he got home his family was happy so they gave him a dog and a cake. But was it really a dog?
Monday, June 10, 2013
20 HR Famine
“The Famine started the famine started” I said to my friend. It was friday and we went the the ICT so we can do our animation. But as soon as it was 12:00 O’clock I was panicking. I wasn’t hungry but I was scared that my stomach might rumble and I will eat something. So I stopped panicking and I was meant to feel hungry for the people at Bougainville in Papua New Guinea.
After school I picked up my sister and went home. I grabbed my towel and went for a shower. Like 15 minutes after I went got changed and was waiting for 6:30 to come. So I waited patiently and I was about to eat so I just remembered that I was in the 20 Hr Famine.
As soon as it was 6:30 I told my mum if we could go to school so we did and I packed my bag in the car and off we went. I got to school and everyone was just wandering around doing nothing so I went to put my name tag on and my colour tag on. I was in group red.
Reds group leader was Rita. And the people in red was Ana, Hueluata, Tyler-Marie, Vivien and Me. Rita is a year 8 and she was the boss of us, she told us what to do and what not to do. Sooner that night our actual leader of all teams (Crusader) told us what we were going to play. So he did and he told us it is Charades.
Before we started Rita told us the signal of movie and singing. Then we started and the first person went us from each group. Tyler-Marie from our group (red) went up first and she was signaling but sadly we didn’t get it.
As soon as Charades finished we played more games and then that night, Deven and her Ambassadors friends came and we had to do like a welcome dance so we did. And we did stomp clap the beat the beat clap clap cheast cheast clap the beat the beat clap twice then we all said “REMIX.” bir, don’t mess with us we are team red we got that girl power and we said it twice that altogether again “REMIX.” Then Tyler-Marie from our group said “Lua pati mole red power red power sike”. Then the other groups did their dance.
Then the winning group was red for the dancing and we were so happy but then before we slept we watched Wreck it Ralf and then we slept. Then in the morning we had to pack our things and they called out the winning group out of everything and it was ...................................................... GREEN! As they finished calling out the winning group some parents came and we had to take like some of these square bar and they were sort of nice then we went home. Relaxed and then did some chores.
Saturday, June 8, 2013
Trampoline & Cake
So just came back from jumping on the tramp and it was fun, I jumped high, low and side to side. My Brother and I started jumping and then my sister came and jumped with us so that made us jump really high.
As soon as we finished jumping high and low, we asked my mum to bake a cake for all of us. So she did and it is nearly finished. It smells nice and looks really delicious. I really can't wait to taste the yum cake that my mum baked!!
TAKE THE BIGGEST BITE!
TAKE A JUMP YOU'LL JUMP HIGH!
Popcorn
Just then my sister, brother and I ate popcorn. It was so so buttery. I ate heaps today because I was so hungry from the 20hr Famine. Well that was fun and had heaps of activities!!
Have a bite of our yum Popcorn!!!
Friday, June 7, 2013
Thursday, June 6, 2013
Penguins loosing fish
Once there was a man named John and he lived in America. He was so frustrated and felt sad for the penguins in Antarctica so he went there and stayed for a while. John went to that really cold place because the penguins had no fish.
As soon as he moved to Antarctica he tried finding some fish but there were just hardly any there. But while he was searching for some yum fish he saw a man but he still was looking for fish until he would get to him. John was on his knees and as soon as he got close to the man he stood up straight.
The man he met was the same height and width. So he started talking to him like he knew him really well so he asked what is his name and he replied “Gus” “Ohh Gus great name” John replied. Then John told Gus all about what happened to the fish in Antarctica so Gus helped along.
They were thinking that the fish were gone because there was a blizzard and because it was freezing! But they never knew there was one because the blizzard was going before they got to Antarctica. How about you? So they thought really well and they said “The fish are gone because they went at the bottom of the sea because it is warmer.”
So they both went back to where they came from and sent some fish to Antarctica. And a few days later they went back to the freezing place Antarctica and saw heaps of penguins that were so happy because they had fish and were laying eggs.
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