Once there was a man named John and he lived in America. He was so frustrated and felt sad for the penguins in Antarctica so he went there and stayed for a while. John went to that really cold place because the penguins had no fish.
As soon as he moved to Antarctica he tried finding some fish but there were just hardly any there. But while he was searching for some yum fish he saw a man but he still was looking for fish until he would get to him. John was on his knees and as soon as he got close to the man he stood up straight.
The man he met was the same height and width. So he started talking to him like he knew him really well so he asked what is his name and he replied “Gus” “Ohh Gus great name” John replied. Then John told Gus all about what happened to the fish in Antarctica so Gus helped along.
They were thinking that the fish were gone because there was a blizzard and because it was freezing! But they never knew there was one because the blizzard was going before they got to Antarctica. How about you? So they thought really well and they said “The fish are gone because they went at the bottom of the sea because it is warmer.”
So they both went back to where they came from and sent some fish to Antarctica. And a few days later they went back to the freezing place Antarctica and saw heaps of penguins that were so happy because they had fish and were laying eggs.
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